求雅思作文批改顺便估下分万分感谢

[雅思写作地图题只写变化不写方位得分吗]是可以得分的但是分数会比较低一直以来，地图题都是广大小烤鸭们最恐惧的东西，提心吊胆，就怕在考场上与之相遇。很多考生在考卷上发现小作文是地图题目的时候，直接认定“这场考...+阅读

As the cyber techniques continue to develop and the user number of computers, mobile phones and other communicating devices continue to grow, some people believe our traditional skills of letter writing will disappear fully. In my view, I cannot agree with this view for the following reasons. At the begining, the skill of writing cannot be replaced by the usage of any electronic devices. The skill of writing is the ability of expressing ideas in written languages. And what the application of computers and cellphones has changed is only the format but not the content of the written documents. However, the content relates highly to the educational levels and the living and working experiences of individuals Thus, if a person is well educated, no matter how often he or she uses the computers, his ability in writing letter can be maintained fully. Besides, even the advanced communication techniques has been highly prevalent in contemperary society, chances are still available for individuals to write traditionally. And the examples of them are varied. Couples sometimes manually write love letters to each other with the purpose of showing strong emotions; students in all educational levels are still using the pens to answer most of the exam questions including the writing questions and in some perticular situations, people tend to write something traditionally such as leaving messages to family members or friends. In conclusion, while the advanced communication techniques and the associated devices are spreading into nearly every aspects of people's lives, this does not mean that our traditional skills of writting will head to disappear. That is because what the application of these communication devices have changed is the format but not the real content of writing and there are sitll plenty of opportunities for individuals to write by using their pens. 我觉得你写的好像有点离题啊，题目问的是传统的书信技能是不是因为使用电脑和手机而完全丧失，你在第2段写的是电脑的好处，而不是你是否同意这个观点。

我从写了一遍，供你参考。